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Monday, July 24, 2006

Two Cinquains Before I Away – Won’t You Send Me More?

A nod to the Contessa here, whose request for a cinquain in the dandy’s parlour inspired me.

Cinquain
tricky form
exponentially it expands
feeling tight, it contracts
abruptly

Bird
traveling tern
soft wings flapping
dervish ecstasy of flight
swoosh!

I am off soon on a summer migratory path, winging my way to Thailand (a path I’ve flown before) and to Laos (a new tangent on my route – terns have a tendency to go off their beaten paths - we love side trips you know). I have much to do before I depart on Friday and though I will no doubt swoop by other blogs just a bit (I don’t want to wear out my wings too much – that flight over the Pacific is a long one) I expect not to post for a while.

And so while I’m away, I invite you all to write your own cinquains and post them here for your amusement (and mine – of course). I will be so delighted to check in as I can in flight and read your words of charm and delight . (Oh hell…that was bad, now wasn’t it?)

For those unfamiliar with the form, here’s a template:

Line 1: title/topic/subject in 1 word or 2 syllables
Line 2: description in 2 words or 4 syllables
Line 3: action in 3 words or 6 syllables
Line 4: feeling in 4 words or 8 syllables
Line 5: synonym or some link back to the title in 1 word or 2 syllables.

Sawatdeekah my chickadees - Flap/Flap/Swoosh!

29 Comments:

Blogger K9 said...

/bark bark bark

boyed! youre gone??? travel safely. i wish you adventure and beauty. you'll be missed. (ill get to work on that cinquin)/grr

July 25, 2006 6:20 AM  
Blogger Aunty Belle said...

Happy currents!

July 25, 2006 10:37 AM  
Blogger ThursdayNext said...

Birdie
You are lovely
When you are in Thailand
We shall miss you oh so deeply
Soar!

July 25, 2006 12:42 PM  
Blogger disguised said...

What fun, bird!!!!

Enjoy your journey--and find your way back home.

July 25, 2006 3:40 PM  
Blogger Pete Bogs said...

wow, heading to Thailand! planning to Thai one on, eh? that's cool, but no sex tourism, ok? we don't want you getting bird flu from anyone...

catch you again when you've been de-Laosed!

July 25, 2006 4:35 PM  
Blogger Jack K. said...

bird
fly freely
enjoy the sights and sounds
we'll enjoy your recounts
swoosh!

July 25, 2006 4:53 PM  
Blogger K9 said...

/bark bark bark

rottie
shadowy black
wagging smiling (soft) grrr
wishing bon voyage to the tern
/ howl!

July 27, 2006 7:39 AM  
Blogger Percival said...

Complain

what a bore
counting the syllables
makes me feel so constipated:
for what?

- the ever lyrical and free,
Percy

July 28, 2006 8:48 AM  
Blogger velvet acid tongue said...

hey have a safe and splendid trip!

will ahfa give the cinquain a try ...

:D

July 31, 2006 10:36 AM  
Blogger HanktheDog said...

frisbee
soft, nylon
squish, trap, snag
covetouse,energized,exuberant,
transcendent
sacred disc

HanktheDog

August 02, 2006 7:02 PM  
Blogger velvet acid tongue said...

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August 09, 2006 1:29 PM  
Blogger velvet acid tongue said...

junkie
slave to a drug
sells her body for a fix
engulfed -- savage shame
vein filth

August 14, 2006 2:04 AM  
Blogger Pete Bogs said...

bird, when shall you come home to roost? I want you to check out my flying pics!

August 14, 2006 5:10 PM  
Blogger Mayden's Voyage said...

Bird Song
Wise from traveling
Post very soon
We've missed your words
Bird Melody~


(perhaps a rough draft would have helped! lol!)

August 15, 2006 6:45 PM  
Blogger Bird said...

these "cinquains" are a delight. many thanks to all!

August 15, 2006 10:15 PM  
Blogger boneman said...

LONELY
crying alone-
no more spoons-
like I'm a porcupine.
Shunned.

September 02, 2006 7:58 AM  
Blogger boneman said...

since this was somewhat depressing, and what being an artist and all, let me slide across to the complimentary "color," if you will....

BUTTON
Parted lips
wet, quivering excitement
pulled into my mouth.
Sweet clit.

or, is this too far?

September 03, 2006 8:03 AM  
Blogger Bird said...

oh my and ooooh.

September 03, 2006 8:13 AM  
Blogger boneman said...

ok....there's one and two...
how about


THREE
almost sacred....
friends for forever....
living life and laughing.
Amigos.

September 03, 2006 2:09 PM  
Blogger Bird said...

you are on a roll here boneman -
who are the three? hmmmm...
which three? hahaha!

here's a challenge -

cinquains have 5 lines -

so why not make 5 cinquains - you have two to go...

digging this am i (oh hell, i'm talking/writing like yoda)

hah!

September 03, 2006 2:19 PM  
Blogger boneman said...

SMALL
quiet party,
some play cards....
others play at romance....
who wins?

September 03, 2006 2:27 PM  
Blogger boneman said...

CHRISTMAS
Mall time....
in flowing crowds....
being dragged into a moving mass of people, can't get out! Oh, man! DANG! They're dragging me along the main stretch....wait a minit wait a minit, I think I can get out.....

September 03, 2006 2:31 PM  
Blogger boneman said...

too many people.


like peir 39 at Thanksgiving.

September 03, 2006 2:31 PM  
Blogger boneman said...

CARDS
Simply four
two on two
someone has'ta shoot th'moon
Euchered!

September 03, 2006 2:34 PM  
Blogger boneman said...

These cinquain thingies are some fun.
Only a "freshman" to the poetry flyin' about the blogland....
Percy and K9 both prodded me on a bit, though, talk about obsessive compulsive. Fer about three weeks, everything I wrote was in rhyme, and most of it in limerick style.
Thing is, it seemed like another way t'make folks smile.
Not that it was so hard, y'know.
It also helped curb m'fast tongue and opinionated show.

I do go on at times, and not always am I undersatood well.
I'de venture t'call it heaven
though at times it feels like hell.

September 03, 2006 2:40 PM  
Blogger boneman said...

probably should have done one, two three four five....oh
Maybe i did.
ain't gonna go to a mall anytime soon, though.
I hate it when I go shopping fer socks and end up "salmoned" into a health food store.

Not that health food is bad, mind ya.
Just that I'm a meat and potatoes (or noodles) kind'a guy....
and where are those socks?

September 03, 2006 4:25 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Where did you find it? Interesting read »

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Excellent, love it! »

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